Story of 132 pages needs to be expanded by adding more detail and dialogue to about 185-190 pages. Story is currently in 12 chapters, but a couple more chapters could be added.
Below is a short synopsis to give you an idea of the story.
News Flash: People commuting on train to work on East coast from Portland, Oregon to Seattle, Washington for their jobs. Train travelling at excessive speed kills twenty people and hundreds more were injured. Of those that were killed, all were found in the ruins except one man, who remained unaccounted for.
Profiles of various people on train. Executive female who loved to ride train versus other modes of transportation, as she found it relaxing. Male who liked to ride trains as he found he could more easily get his work done. Several other people with stories. Mother with children. One man had an engineering background.
Man was not found. Detective knows the man and his background as he had met him in a bar once after a golf tournament,...